Nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

Great profile photo! Can you send it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her add a white background for you? This will help it look even more professional and inviting.

I don’t like your background photo very much. It’s not very inviting. I’d also like you to email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

I like the general direction you’re going in!! We can make it look a bit more appealing. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

NICE content and start!

Ideally, your sales letter would look something like this:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

I even recommend copying the format and content *we teach it in the program* and filling it in with your own info.

Or check out Kent’s, this would also be good to refer to because you HAVE the info, let’s just organize your points:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Call To Action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!

• This reply was modified 4 years, 10 months ago by n d.

Hi @james-blakemore! Oops, so sorry about that – it looks like I accidentally clicked on the wrong person to tag but the information is for you! Technical error.

What are some of the questions you had?

Hi @james-blakemore! I understand – in your sales letter, try to instead tell them how you can help them and why they should work with you.

For example, you’re attentive to detail and will keep them in the loop the entire way.

It’s okay if you may not have the credentials you’d like but continue to progress and add content. Try looking at my feedback above with new eyes 🙂

Hi @james-blakemore, your profile looks SO much better. You did a really good job implementing my feedback!

To confirm, you emailed Lindsey in regards to the profile image and banner image, right?

Also, I do want to make your headline a little more appealing. Please copy and paste this into your headline slot. This will help grab people’s attention easily.

Need BETTER Housing And Lodging WITHOUT Added Stress? ☆ EXPERT Housing Solutionist Helping Clients In Delaware Basin ☆☞MSG Me!

^ I hope you like that a little more!

If not, let me know.

Take care and keep moving forward – super proud of you!

Hi @james-blakemore, sorry about that! Try this:

Need BETTER Housing + Lodging WITHOUT Added Stress?☆EXPERT Housing Solutionist Helping Clients In Delaware Basin☞MSG Me!

Great 🙂 @james-blakemore !!

Hi @james-blakemore, oh no! That’s very unlike Lindsey, as she typically responds within 24 hours.

Have you checked your spam box??

PLEASE email her back and CC me in that email:

Lindsey@coredm.com

Negeen@coredm.com

Thank you!